Dirge for a Muse

A tally sheet of flaws
Lying around the dormant house
And the fan spins that idly

With every minute that second hand creeps
Dashing in for first
Who could believe what was said?

Unanswered calls, irregular visits
I see no face-to-face meets
A persona brooking on the cusp of death

Every second earns you a tick
In my tally sheet of flaws
With every minute that second hand creeps

Puts you nearer to the bin


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3 thoughts on “Dirge for a Muse

  1. Try less adjectives next time. Your last two stanzas (one stanza and stand-alone line) read strongest for me. But “dormant house”, “unanswered calls, irregular visits” doesn’t give much imagery to work with. Best is if there’s imagery suggested that can be built up upon by the reader. That’s my take on poetry anyway. People have been successful with lots of adjectives too, so I think you should decide which better helps you bring your poetry across.

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