What I Saw (revised)

Along the path
I see a petal
From a guilty rose
The threads of Time
Snaps and breaks
As it floats
Into the black cesspool
Juxtaposing against
The blackness
A spot of
Or is it white?
Remembrance fails
As it vanishes
Into the void
Just a fragment
Of all in


A new version, after I went through its structure again. Spot the changes and tell me which one is better my dear readers …

Yours truly

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